sentence writing about comma

SENTENCE WRITING

Combine the following sets of sentences in different ways according to Comma Rules 4, 5, and 6. Try to combine each set in a way that needs commas and in a way that does not need commas. In other words, try to make an element “scoopable” in one sentence and not “scoopable” in other. You maybe reorder in details and change the phrasing as you wish. Sample responses are provided in the Answer section.

            I think about the average student’s life.

The average student’s life is full of distractions and extraneous information from the internet and many other forms of media.

She plans to buy herself an expensive watch.

It is sold by Tag Heuer.

Tag Heuer is her favorite brand.

Only two people were in the store when the commercial was filmed.

One was the manager.

The other was an actor.

REVIEW OF THE COMMA

SIX COMMA RULES

1.      Put a comma before for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so when they connect two independent clauses.

2.      Put a comma between three or more items in a series.

3.      Put a comma after an introductory expression or before a tag comment or question.

4.      Put commas around the name of a person spoken to.

5.      Put commas around words like however or therefore when they interrupt a sentence.

6.      Put commas around unnecessary additional (“scoopable”) information.

SENTENCE WRITING

Wrute at least one sentence of your own tp demonstrate each of the six comma rules. Keep the result in your sentence writing folder.

perbaikan discussion essay terbaruuu

YURLIANIS

K2-2013(December 15, 2014)

ID Number : 1300891

Discussion Essay (Perbaikan)

Advantages and Disadvantages of Fast Food

            Fast food provides the convenience for people. Today, most of people who are living in cities, especially people at work, have a less time to cook and also have full schedule everyday. Therefore, fast food is the better one and become their favorite way to save their time . Not only people are who busy at work, but also students. College students have less time at home beside many tasks which have to finish first so that they decided to buy fast food. Well, there are advantages and disadvantages of fast food.

            The first advantages of fast food is saving time. As we know, there is no waiting for fast food. It serves just a few minutes. Especially for busy people, who are do not have time to cook, they can buy fast food easily and fastly. In addition, if they are in hurry to go to work, they just order it by calling on the phone. They would not want to wait for a long time to get some foods and go everywhere to buy it. It can save their time more wisely rather than cooking by themselves.  The other side, for students  who studying from morning until evening, they can do the same way. They have a less time at home, and also for cooking food. They have many tasks which have to do, washing clothes, and also house work. So, they like to order fast food. Clark, S (2010) said that fast food restaurants are located nearly everywhere, it provides customers with simple meals without they need to spend time travelling far distances just to purchase food. It also means the customer does not have to spend a large amount of time inside and outside kitchen gathering ingredients and  trying to prepare for a single meal, meaning time required for kitchen cleaning is also not required. Additionally, Wolverson M, N (2009) said that fast food are always prepared at fast speed, meaning the consumer does not need to wait for a long time just for their order.

            The second advantages of fast food is cheaper than home cooked food. It is cheaper because the constumers just order it and pay the cost. They do not need to pay travelling cost, buying ingredients, and also paying gas. In contrast, cooked food is higher because the customer needs to buy everything to make what they want. Additionally, they have to go to market, paying travelling fee, and paying gas. Not only that, but also they must cook at home, and also wasting their time. For busy costumers are wasting their time. For them, time is money. According to Bose D, N.N, caused the customers prefer to fast food than home cooked food. Fast food restaurants can provide customers with simple large meal sets with minimal cost. However, Brown J (2009) said that this easily lead to customers eating excessive fast food.

            On the other hand, fast food also has disadvantages side. The first disadvantages of fast food is for health condition of the costumers. Fast food are generally made with oil and addictives, such as salt, sugar , and etc. These  increases the risk of developing diseases. Then, for busy people they do not care about it. In addition, when the costumers consumed too much fast food, they might become obesity, diabetes, high blood pressure, and also strokes. In addition, it consists of too much calories which caused deadly diseases too. Bose D, N. D said that customers may also consume excessive fast food because it is cheap to buy in large quantity. Also, Brown ,J (2009) said that research has been done proving it is more likely for people living near fast food branches to become obese.

            The second disadvantages of fast food is losing of tradition eating together. As we know that eating fast food especially in restaurant is very fast so that most of people cannot have time to eat together, and also chat while eating. Not only that, but also for the parents have full schedule at work, they do not have more time to gather with their children, and lose opportunity to talk and share together. It can decrease the relationship between parents and children. They rarely get together and share both of them. According to Bose, D. N.D, this eventually lead to families losing much gathering time and thinning the bonds between family member. Additionally, Brown J, (2009) said that many children today  prefer eating fast food with their friends of their age rather than with their parents, this could also decrease the amount of time where the whole family actually gather.

            The last disadvantages of fast food is the taste. Fast food may be cheap. However, the taste is not also pleasant than home cooked food. Home cooked food is tastes better than fast food. Fast food is almost too much sugar, salt, pepper, oil, and etc. We cannot ask how much flavours are and how the taste is. However, home cooked food is easier. We can make what we want to make and also the taste. In addition, home cooked food is more healthy than fast food because we cooked it by ourselves, and also we know about it. Then, Wolverson M, N. (2009) Said that excessives artificial flavouring can also lead to many health problems as the customers is not consuming the addictives with moderations

            In conclusion, fast food may be convenient, cheaper, saving time, however, it also has disadvantages which caused the risks of diseases. We need to eat food that consists of vitamins for our health. In addition, we do not focus on the tastes, but the benefit for our body.   Overall, it is much healthier to eat from home cooked food because from the tastes we can make how much the flavouring we want. Not too much sugar, salt, pepper, and etc. In despite of  we need much money to buy ingredients, and also wasting time to cook it, however it saves for health.  In my opinion, I prefer to choose home cooked food. My reasons is it is healthier than fast food, we can make what kinds of taste we want, and also we cook by ourselves. We need to think twice before eating fast food.

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Channel health news, viewed 9 Oktober 2014, (http://healthnewschannel.net/Disadvantages-of-fast-food.html

Mayer Jean and Jeanne Goldberg 1986, viewed 9 Oktober 2014, (http://articles.chicagotribune.com/1986-09-04/entertaiment/fast-food-diet-fat-total-calories

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My effort will be succeed in writing

Name   : Yurlianis

Class    : k2/2013

NIM    : 1300891

Course : Essay writing

My effort will be succeed in writing

Success in writing is my dream. I can improve my ability in writing and share to other people. I am happy because I passed  in writing 1. I felt that my ability in writing can improve step by step. However, developing my idea is a little difficult. Sometimes I write the topic too general and difficult to understand it.

To make it success, I am going to do some efforts. One of them is making a diary. Diary is really important to help me in process of writing. My lecture gave me task to make a diary everyday. It is useful in process of writing. In addition, diary will help us to write well, in grammatical, choosing a good word, coherence, and etc. Since senior high school, my teacher said that writing is really important, and has a never ending process. So that, I always try this way in order to write better.

The second is reading book. Book is world’s window. If I read more, I can get more. Not only book, but also  magazine, novel, and article.In addition, I have to read another example of writing from the other people. It can help me in process of writing. Then, I can learn from that example of writing about grammatical, coherence, ideas, and etc. During in process of writing, knowledge is important. We have to learn much about it because of reading book, we can know our mistake in writing.

The last is doing the revision about what we have written. This is important to know which one is our mistake. Then, we can correct it and change it to the better one. Beside that, this revision can improve our knowledge in writing. This revision can do by our friends, senior, roommate, or our lecturer. If I seldom to revision what I have written, I do not know where my mistakes is. I get a new idea from other people that can advantage for our writing. It means that revision is important in process of writing.

Many ways that I can try to success in writing. In this paper, I just explain three of them by making a diary, reading book, and also doing the revision about it. We have different way to say that. However, we have same purposes in order to write-well.

The benefit of studying writing in academic and social life

Name   : Yurlianis

Class    : k2/2013

NIM    : 1300891

Course : Essay writing

The benefit of studying writing in academic and social life

            Writing has benefit in our life, in academic life and social life. In academic life, I want to explain three advantages. First, helping us to make a paper, thesis, and etc. Writing is a process to make our writing  good. It means that if our writing is good, we can make a paper easily because we learn how to be better in writing by using an outlining, coherence, grammatical and vocabularies.

 Second, getting achievement in academic, such as make a wall magazine, comic and something new that we share to other people. Then, we can create a poetry, our experience, and short story. Then, if our writing is good we can join competition like create a comic, novel, and short story. In addition, we can make a paper well, then publish what we have written in magazine or social media, such as e-mail, blogspot, facebook,etc.

Third, we can become a travel writer or journalistic. A travel writer is a person who  can write news which publish in magazine on the plane. If we have an achievement in writing,  we can get it. So, we can get income and buy something what we want. Beside that, we can become a journalist. In addition, we write- down the real news and publish in public. Not only that, but also in social media too, such as facebook, twitter, magazines, and etc.

            In social life, writing giving information to the other people. In addition, what we have written about something new, or important information we can publish it. Beside that, it helps them to study and improving their knowledge about what we have written. They can get sources from that. We write something then publish it in social media.

Everybody has opinion about the benefit of writing, include in academic and social life.  For me, writing  is important lesson especially in english department. For instance, if we want to make a skripsi and paper, writing skill is important to do it. If we can not write well, we will face in difficult way to do it, but if we can, it is easier to understand. I think that is benefits of writing in our academic life and social life. We have different word to say that, but the goal is same.

Discussion Essay

YURLIANIS

K2-2013(Oktober 23, 2014)

ID Number : 1300891

Discussion Essay (Hasil class review)

Advantages and disadvantages of fast food

            Fast food provides the convenience for people. Today, most of people who are living in cities, especially people at work, have a less time to cook and also have full schedule everyday. Therefore, fast food is the better one and become their favorite way to save their time . Not only people are who busy at work, but also students. College students have less time at home beside many tasks which have to finish first so that they decided to buy fast food. Well, there are advantages and disadvantages of fast food.

            The first advantages of fast food is saving time. As we know, there is no waiting for fast food. It serves just a few minutes. Especially for busy people, who are do not have time to cook, they can buy fast food easily and fastly. In addition, if they are in hurry to go to work, they just order it by calling on the phone. They would not want to wait for a long time to get some foods and go everywhere to buy it. It can save their time more wisely rather than cooking by themselves.  The other side, for students  who studying from morning until evening, they can do the same way. They have a less time at home, and also for cooking food. They have many tasks which have to do, washing clothes, and also house work. So, they like to order fast food. Clark, S (2010) said that fast food restaurants are located nearly everywhere, it provides customers with simple meals without they need to spend time travelling far distances just to purchase food. It also means the customer does not have to spend a large amount of time inside and outside kitchen gathering ingredients and  trying to prepare for a single meal, meaning time required for kitchen cleaning is also not required. Additionally, Wolverson M, N (2009) said that fast food are always prepared at fast speed, meaning the consumer does not need to wait for a long time just for their order.

            The second advantages of fast food is cheaper than home cooked food. It is cheaper because of the constumers just order it and pay the cost. They do not need to pay travelling cost, buying ingredients, and also paying gas. In contrast, cooked food is higher because the customer needs to buy everything to make what they want. Additionally, they have to go to market, paying travelling fee, and paying gas. Not only that, but also they must cook at home, and also wasting their time. For busy costumers are wasting their time. For them, time is money. According to Bose D, N.N, caused the customers prefer to fast food than home cooked food. Fast food restaurants can provide customers with simple large meal sets with minimal cost. However, Brown J (2009) said that this easily lead to customers eating excessive fast food.

            On the other hand, fast food also has disadvantages side. The first disadvantages of fast food is for health condition of the costumers. Fast food are generally made with oil and addictives, such as salt, sugar , and etc. These  increases the risk of developing diseases. Then, for busy people they do not care about it. In addition, when the costumers consumed too much fast food, they might become obesity, diabetes, high blood pressure, and also strokes. In addition, it consists of too much calories which caused deadly diseases too. Bose D, N. D said that customers may also consume excessive fast food because it is cheap to buy in large quantity. Also, Brown ,J (2009) said that research has been done proving it is more likely for people living near fast food branches to become obese.

            The second disadvantages of fast food is losing of tradition eating together. As we know that eating fast food especially in restaurant is very fast so that most of people cannot have time to eat together, and also chat while eating. Not only that, but also for the parents have full schedule at work, they do not have more time to gather with their children, and lose opportunity to talk and share together. It can decrease the relationship between parents and children. They rarely get together and share both of them. According to Bose, D. N.D, this eventually lead to families losing much gathering time and thinning the bonds between family member. Additionally, Brown J, (2009) said that many children today are prefer eating fast food with their friends of their age rather than with their parents, this could also decrease the amount of time where the whole family actually gather.

            The last disadvantages of fast food is the taste. Fast food may be cheap. However, the taste is not also pleasant than home cooked food. Home cooked food is tastes better than fast food. Fast food almost too much sugar, salt, pepper, oil, and etc. We cannot ask how much flavours are and how the taste is. However, home cooked food is easier. We can make what we want to make and also the taste. In addition, home cooked food is more healthy than fast food because we cooked it by ourselves, and also we know about it. Then, Wolverson M, N. (2009) Said that excessives artificial flavouring can also lead to many health problems as the customers is not consuming the addictives with moderations

            In conclusion, fast food may be convenient, cheaper, saving time, however, it also has disadvantages which caused the risks of diseases. We need to eat food that consists of vitamins for our health. In addition, we do not focused on the tastes, but the benefit for our body.   Overall, it is much healthier to eat from home cooked food because from the tastes we can make how much the flavouring we want. Not too much sugar, salt, pepper, and etc. In despite of  we need much money to buy ingredients, and also wasting time to cook it, however it saves for health.  In my opinion, I prefer to choose home cooked food. My reasons is it is healthier than fast food, we can make what kinds of taste we want, and also we cook by ourselves. We need to think twice before eating fast food.

Essay Writing assignments 3

Name   : Yurlianis

Class    : k2/2013

NIM    : 1300891

Course : Essay writing

My effort will be succeed in writing

Success in writing is my dream. I can improve my ability in writing and share to other people. I am happy because I passed  in writing 1. I felt that my ability in writing can improve step by step. However, developing my idea is a little difficult. Sometimes I write the topic too general and difficult to understand it.

To make it success, I am going to do some efforts. One of them is making a diary. Diary is really important to help me in process of writing. My lecture gave me task to make a diary everyday. It is useful in process of writing. In addition, diary will help us to write well, in grammatical, choosing a good word, coherence, and etc. Since senior high school, my teacher said that writing is really important, and has a never ending process. So that, I always try this way in order to write better.

The second is reading book. Book is world’s window. If I read more, I can get more. Not only book, but also  magazine, novel, and article.In addition, I have to read another example of writing from the other people. It can help me in process of writing. Then, I can learn from that example of writing about grammatical, coherence, ideas, and etc. During in process of writing, knowledge is important. We have to learn much about it because of reading book, we can know our mistake in writing.

The last is doing the revision about what we have written. This is important to know which one is our mistake. Then, we can correct it and change it to the better one. Beside that, this revision can improve our knowledge in writing. This revision can do by our friends, senior, roommate, or our lecturer. If I seldom to revision what I have written, I do not know where my mistakes is. I get a new idea from other people that can advantage for our writing. It means that revision is important in process of writing.

Many ways that I can try to success in writing. In this paper, I just explain three of them by making a diary, reading book, and also doing the revision about it. We have different way to say that. However, we have same purposes in order to write-well.

Essay Writing assignments 2

Name   : Yurlianis

Class    : k2/2013

NIM    : 1300891

Course : Essay writing

The benefit of studying writing in academic and social life

            Writing has benefit in our life, in academic life and social life. In academic life, I want to explain three advantages. First, helping us to make a paper, thesis, and etc. Writing is a process to make our writing  good. It means that if our writing is good, we can make a paper easily because we learn how to be better in writing by using an outlining, coherence, grammatical and vocabularies.

 Second, getting achievement in academic, such as make a wall magazine, comic and something new that we share to other people. Then, we can create a poetry, our experience, and short story. Then, if our writing is good we can join competition like create a comic, novel, and short story. In addition, we can make a paper well, then publish what we have written in magazine or social media, such as e-mail, blogspot, facebook,etc.

Third, we can become a travel writer or journalistic. A travel writer is a person who  can write news which publish in magazine on the plane. If we have an achievement in writing,  we can get it. So, we can get income and buy something what we want. Beside that, we can become a journalist. In addition, we write- down the real news and publish in public. Not only that, but also in social media too, such as facebook, twitter, magazines, and etc.

            In social life, writing giving information to the other people. In addition, what we have written about something new, or important information we can publish it. Beside that, it helps them to study and improving their knowledge about what we have written. They can get sources from that. We write something then publish it in social media.

Everybody has opinion about the benefit of writing, include in academic and social life.  For me, writing  is important lesson especially in english department. For instance, if we want to make a skripsi and paper, writing skill is important to do it. If we can not write well, we will face in difficult way to do it, but if we can, it is easier to understand. I think that is benefits of writing in our academic life and social life. We have different word to say that, but the goal is same.

Essay Writing assignments 1

Nama   : Yurlianis

Class    : K2/2013

NIM    : 1300891

Course : Essay Writing

My experience during studying writing

Firstly, I am going to say Alhamdulillah because I passed in writing 1 last semester. It was the best experience in my life. I never imagine that I got good mark last semester. I thought  that writing is the difficult lesson, but it is not. During studying in Senior High School, I did not like writing and never try it. It made me bored, but since in college I like to write. The lecturer told me that writing was fun and important part especially in english department. As a college students, we have different ways to say what writing is about.

In my opinion, writing is ability to share something on the paper or written form. There are our experiences, what we have read and our environment. Writing makes someone  happy because they share what is on their mind. Writing is an activity that makes someone tell about their selves. They can tell in diary, or a piece of paper. Writing is one of study which I like. I can write my experience there. During studying  paragraph writing in the last semester, I felt something different in my life. In addition, I have many knowledges about how to be better in writing include my grammar, vocabularies , and choose a good word.

Besides, in writing one I learned much how to be better in writing. I have many experiences there. Besides, I can improve my skill in writing. First, how to choose a good word in our paper. The correlation between one sentence to the other sentences, and paragraph to the paragraph. It makes good meaning and well-organized although I have mistake there. Second, in grammatical. Grammar is difficult for me in writing. I do not know why. I have a little skill in grammar. I have tried it, but step by step I can do that. The last is improving my vocabularies in writing. If we have more vocabularies, it will help to write easier, but if we do not have much vocabularies, we will difficult to write.

During I studied in writing 1 with mr. Saunir and ms. Fitrawati, I have learned much about it. They told us how to be better in writing, especially in essay. They said that before we wrote an essay, we had to write an outline about it including prewriting, outlining, writing, and polishing. Everyweek we made  paragraph then presented it in front of class one by one. After that, all of my friends critisized and corrected it together. Not only that, but also they gave a good idea about it. Presented our essays like that, it will increase our self’s confidence to speak in public and we know about our mistake. In addition, we can ask the lecturer if we are doubt about it.

However, sometimes I was lazy to write because of my ability in grammar. It is my obstacle in writing until now. I always try to study with my friends beside by my self. Since my lecturer said that grammar is important, but vocabulary is more important  than grammar. If we can write in well grammar, but we do not have enough vocabulary it means nothing. However, if we have much vocabularies, and not good in grammar that is better. Everyone can do it if they want to learn more about writing.